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White by ~k0i:iconk0i:

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Emerge from the white
look across the vast emptiness
every step identical
a sure place to get lost
no marks of recognition
no movement recollection
just an overwhelmingness
of nostalgic nonsense
leaving stale empty pain
an ache that throbs
an ache that has a history
has a memory
an empty ache that dulls all senses

Submerge into the white
down into the valley
where every road is different
with many marks of recognition
yet still a sure place to get lost
where all images will
overwhelm, aggravate
smother, cover
add
to the throb
©2004-2009 ~k0i
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Author's Comments

Saw above the clouds rather than below, other feelings managed to surface too.

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~StandingFailure Apr 28, 2004, 2:32:02 PM
good descriptiveness - great work

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I am......a Constant Imperfection

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~Picabo Apr 28, 2004, 3:32:15 PM
nicely structured in a different way...with no punctuations at all;)
you really do get deep in the description in this piece...well written:thumbsup:
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~evildeathpenguin Apr 28, 2004, 3:33:17 PM
It's so wonderful!!! I recently was on a plane...and I couldn't help but stare out at the clouds that reached and passed my horizon. It's a wonderful feeling...and this is a great poem

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~prettyinpiink Apr 28, 2004, 4:26:20 PM
oooh. beautiful. I wish I could say more.

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A wise girl kisses, but doesn't love; listens, but doesn't believe;
and leaves before she is left.
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~sparkgiver Apr 29, 2004, 8:04:43 AM
This really is so beautiful and wonderfully descriptive. sorry I couldn't say anything more enlightening.

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~issamonster Apr 29, 2004, 3:16:11 PM
Great poem, but it makes me ask: where would you rather be? Above or below the clouds? If you can get lost in both, that is. Surrounded by nothingness in one place, and surrounded by busy confusion in the other. I'd definatly choose below, for the nothingness would drive me crazy. :P

Again, great poem.

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Such is love,
Such is life.
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~c0ldblood3db1tch Apr 29, 2004, 11:08:44 PM
That ache sounds familiar. :hug: Your words always touch me...wonderful job sweetie.

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~k0i May 1, 2004, 4:00:18 PM
I agree, I think I would rather be below, because you don't have time to feel nostalgic

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